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Mary's Analysis
- What did you learn from my work? Please elaborate.
I have learned numerous things
from Courtney’s article “The Genetic Inheritance of D.M.D. in Males”. However,
since I am a carrier of D.M.D. and my son has D.M.D. I know a large amount of
information that Courtney presented me with. I did learn more about dystrophin.
I learned that it is a protein that controls how much calcium flows throughout
the body. Also, her genetic tests link was very informative and I learned about
the genetic testing that I could have done while I was pregnant if I had known
that I was a D.M.D. gene carrier.
- What would you like to know more about in my topic?
Please elaborate.
Courtney’s conclusion really
caught my attention. I would really like to know more ways to support D.M.D.
causes because she explains what D.M.D. is very well and she has caught my
attention with her writing. I would just like to know about causes to help
raise awareness about D.M.D.
- My purpose is to ___________. Do you think I
achieved this purpose? Why or why not?
Courtney’s purpose is to
explain what D.M.D. is and encourage her audience to learn more about the
disease. She has accomplished her purpose because she has broken down what
D.M.D. is and has explained it in common language and not technical medical
terms. She has persuaded me to create more awareness about the journey in finding
a cure for D.M.D. and helping those affected fight it.
- My thesis statement is ____________. Do you think
I have supported this thesis? Why or why not?
Courtney’s thesis statement is “Duchenne
Muscular Dystrophy is a debilitating disease that many people need to be made
aware so that more research can be done to help find a cure.” She has supported
her thesis perfectly in my opinion. She has analyzed the disease and broken in
down in to simple terms. Her links and information that she provides help break
down her topic even more and makes the audience more knowledgeable about D.M.D.
She has raised awareness about the disease by explaining that there is no cure
for the disease and her YouTube video is an emotional additive to her article
that further helps to raise awareness about D.M.D.
- (If applicable) Did you find the quality of my recorded
podcast convincing? Are you moved to take action? Why or why not?
I found the quality of her
podcast to be perfect. You can tell that Courtney has done her research and is
a very reliable source. She also has a tone that is not the same (it fluctuates).
She also has a certain curiosity and energy to her voice that makes the
listener believe that she really cares about her topic and is inspired by it. I
am moved once again to take action. Her podcast makes me want to help all of
the children in the world that have D.M.D. fight it and help find a cure.
Believe me, with 3 other children, a husband, and a full time job, helping care
for my son with D.M.D. is not easy at all.
- What do you want to do after reading my work? Please
elaborate.
I want to help Courtney raise awareness about
D.M.D. and help find a cure. D.M.D. is not a common disease that many people
know about. It is a serious condition that many people need to open up their
eyes to. I cannot say it enough, with medical bills, medication expenses,
depression, doctor visits, and test that have to be done we cannot get enough help.
The economy is rough still and we need to raise awareness so that families that
have members suffering from D.M.D. need all the help that they can get because no
one should suffer because they cannot pay. I believe that what Courtney has
written and the fact that your class is making their work known awareness will
be spread and may hopefully one day cause enough awareness and find a cure
before it’s too late. Thank you for letting me be a part of this.
My Plans For Revision/Expansion
I believe that according to Mary’s reactions there is not very much for me to do. However, I plan on adding some sites and foundations in to my webtext that help raise awareness about D.M.D. and help raise money in hopes of finding a cure. Also, I believe I can elaborate more on the fact that there is no cure for D.M.D. and that every little bit helps. My webtext may turn in to more of a persuasion piece than an analyzing piece.
